Please upload Lauren as too big, frame goes over your menu on your home page so can't read your evaluation. Email me when you have done this. You could also ask Mr Seal re sorting out date when you upload work onto your blog. Will assess when re uploaded.
Panels 2 and 3: Re upload Panels again as they are sideways!!!! That is if you can, see if you can upload under the heading.
1) Panel 4: Breakfast Club music video is not relevant and not a patch on yours!!! Remove any references to this music video which suggests a female dependent on a male, whilst your performer is defined through her aspirational dreams which she defines independent of “another”. In a sense your performer has a similar experience to Tom in “Tom’s Midnight Garden”. The world of his dreams is one of escaping the reality of real time into an enchanted garden than existed decades ago. Towards the end of the novel he races into his midnight garden as the clock strikes 13 and ends up falling over onto the concrete and dustbin lids of real time.
You could add that the layers on Panel 4 reflect the illusory nature of the music video and thus reinforce coherence between the music video and the print productions.
Focused, articulate and interesting. With revisions and possibly a reference to the novel I suggest Level 4. Well done Lauren. A pleasure to read.
Please upload Lauren as too big, frame goes over your menu on your home page so can't read your evaluation. Email me when you have done this. You could also ask Mr Seal re sorting out date when you upload work onto your blog. Will assess when re uploaded.
ReplyDeletePanels 2 and 3: Re upload Panels again as they are sideways!!!! That is if you can, see if you can upload under the heading.
ReplyDelete1) Panel 4: Breakfast Club music video is not relevant and not a patch on yours!!! Remove any references to this music video which suggests a female dependent on a male, whilst your performer is defined through her aspirational dreams which she defines independent of “another”. In a sense your performer has a similar experience to Tom in “Tom’s Midnight Garden”. The world of his dreams is one of escaping the reality of real time into an enchanted garden than existed decades ago. Towards the end of the novel he races into his midnight garden as the clock strikes 13 and ends up falling over onto the concrete and dustbin lids of real time.
You could add that the layers on Panel 4 reflect the illusory nature of the music video and thus reinforce coherence between the music video and the print productions.
Focused, articulate and interesting. With revisions and possibly a reference to the novel I suggest Level 4. Well done Lauren. A pleasure to read.